Comparisons

A comparison of the original and a rewrite for those interesdted in seeing work evolve.  I would like to post these side by side, but cannot, because the html apparently deletes spaces.  For the japanese poem, I inserted 5 to 20 html hard spaces per line, and it took about 8 hours of formatting.  I won’t do that again.  If anyone one knows how to set a tab in each line, or 2 left-aligned columns split down the center of the page space in html (or css or whatever protocol this page uses), please let me know.  Thanks, here’s the poetry.

Poetry (A little pretentious?)

This is the love of words,
of cadence set upon the sea of rhyme
caressed within your heart,
tossed upon your tongue into verse
into rhythm, song and understanding.

This is culture savored and renewed
This is the face of Helen,
seen in the lyrics of rock and rap
discovered fresh by children
written on walls throughout the city
slammed upon library tables daily.

This is the regret of the poet,
as the the poetry of yore
founders on the mythic remains
bardic singings retreatedly lost
burning meaning in well formed verse
forcing rhyme to a line while chasing
the rules of quartet and quintain.

Sappho, Tupac, Chaucer, Eminem, Beowulf
LL Cool J, Oscar Wilde, Nikki GioV, and Wright
laid down the sound of the words
followed the meaning of rhythm
forcing the song into language.
and sold the rap onstage.

Poetry

The love of words,
of cadence set upon by rhyme
caressed within a heart,
tossed upon a tongue to verse
to rhythm, song and spoke emotion.

This is culture savored and renewed
This is the face of Helen,
seen in lyrics of rock and rap
discovered fresh by children
written on walls throughout the city
slammed upon library tables daily.

The regret of the poet,
as the the poetry of yore
founders on mythic remains
bardic singings retreatedly lost
burnt meaning in verse
forced rhyme to lines and rules
of quartet and quintain.

Sappho, Homer, Tupac, Chaucer,
Eminem, Beowulf, Cool J, Bai
Oscar Wilde, Nikki GioV, and Wright
laid down the sound of words
followed the meaning of rhythm
forcing song into language.
and sold the rap onstage. it still
lives on and we embrace it.

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