Monthly Archives: April 2006

OK, time for the commentators to help

What we need here is a discussion about punctuation in poetry, or what should I do with the Enjo Poem? I think the spacing defines the rhythm, and punctuation will be redundant here. But that is my own masterly artistic … Continue reading

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Some of the Japanese work

Enjo-Kosai children (Tokyo) There are heavy sinful nights      on Tokyo’s flashy streets           what Gaijin call the true Bladerunner dark                where wheezing suits of Yakuza                     suck ramen noodles hotly                          over gritty golden teeth where a million black umbrellas      hide a thousand … Continue reading

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Well, that last needs work.

Walking Past the Park at the VA Hospital Bits of color flash in the palm, fingers tighten, loosen twist and twitch in nervous candor Something in brown and tremulous hands held airily or softly or in fear of breakage Hands … Continue reading

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A rewrite of the Hemingway draft

////// There was a bit here for comparison, but FYI to those following this blog, and especially to Gracie, this is not it. The original will suffice until it is bettered, or proves itself sufficient.////////////

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Commentary poem on Eng. Lit. and Hemingway teachers

A Poem In The Modern Style Hemingway’s passage about men drinking together on the eve of battle during The Spanish Civil War describes two men comparing pistols the length of the barrels the size of the bullets. This is always … Continue reading

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